考研英語寫作小作文批改範文：感謝信
0-4分
第一篇
Dear Elle,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you gave me help at the school party last Sunday. If it had not been for your assistance in you lend me your beautiful dress, I fear that I would have been appearing in once a year campus dancing party.
Everyone agrees that it was you who generously offered dress to me. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意見：
Dear Elle,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you gave me help(for 後面不能加句子，可改爲your help) at the school party last Sunday. If it had not been for your assistance in you lend(改爲 lending) me your beautiful dress, I fear that I would (加 not)have been appearing (appeared)in(改爲at) once a year (可以用一個定語從句來修飾，此處刪掉)campus dancing party(加上 ,which is held only once every year ).
Every one agrees that it was you who generously offered(加the ) dress to me. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
2分
微點評：第一段的最後一句話中，由於沒有寫not，使文章的意思完全相反，因此，一定要好好研究一下虛擬語氣的用法。另外，for 後面是不能加句子的。
第二篇
Dear Bob,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you to help me to improve my English during these days. If it had not been for your assistance in teaching me various knowledge including the culture of English, Then help me to practice English face to face, I fear that I would have been seek to the way of learning English for a long time without your help.
Everyone agrees that it was you who are warmly and likely to help others without the pay. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
修改意見：
Dear Bob,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you to help me to improve my English during these days. If it had not been for your assistance in teaching me various knowledge including the culture of English, Then(刪除) help(改爲helping) me to practice English face to face, I fear that I would have been seek(改爲seeking) to the way of learning English for a long time without your help.(刪除)
Every one agrees that it was you who are warmly and likely(likely 是很可能的意思)to help others without the pay(it was …who..是強調句，此句可以改爲，it was you who are so warmly to help others for free). Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
4分
微點評：寫完書信要有yours sincerely 和你的名字。英語的句號是.此外，建議你看一下關於強調句和虛擬語氣的知識。
第三篇
Dear Bob,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for the help you give me about learning English. If it had not been for your assistance in a variety of activities including holding funny discussions with me, teaching me singing English songs, playing simple English Games, and so on, I fear that I would have been searching a wrong and difficult way to learn English and feeling unhappy to learn it.
Every one agrees that it was you who give me many opportunities to speak English loudly, beacuse you know that I am so shy to talk with others by English. Your help raise my level of proficiency in English, and now I enjoy greatest interst in English both listening and writing.
Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意見：
Dear Bob,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for the help you give(改爲gave) me about learning English. If it had not been for your assistance in (in 後面要加doing sth.)a variety of activities including(刪除) holding funny discussions with me, teaching me singing English songs,(加and) playing simple English games, and so on(刪除), I fear that I would have been searching(改爲going) a wrong and difficult way to learn English and feeling unhappy to learn it(刪除).
Every one agrees that it was you who give(改爲gave) me many opportunities to speak English loudly, (改爲use 首字母大寫)beacuse(拼寫錯誤，改爲because) you know that I am so shy to talk with others by(改爲in) English. Your help raise my level of proficiency(中式英語) in English, and now I enjoy ( have)greatest (改爲great)interst(拼寫錯誤interest) in English both listening and writing.
Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
3分
微點評：標點符號與後面的單詞之間空一格。歎號後面的第一個單詞首字母也要大寫。單詞拼寫的錯誤儘量避免。建議你好好學習一下有關虛擬語氣的知識點，多讀一些英語文章，可有效杜絕中式英語。
第四篇
Dear Bob,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm help in the process of my seeking job conformed to my past decades training, after i graduated from peking university.
If it had not been for your assistance in recommendation to the prestigious company in China. i fear that i would have been on the job road back and forth .i really appreciate this precious opportunity ,which you offered. every one agrees that it was you who wrote a letter to the esteemed company boss, regarding as my qualifications ,education back –ground ,and my special skills at computer program which i have a huge intrest in. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! please accept my gratitude.
修改意見：
Dear Bob,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm help in the process of my(刪除my) seeking job conformed to my past decades training, after i(大寫)graduated from peking university(兩個單詞的首字母大寫).
If it had not been for your assistance in recommendation (改爲recommending)to the prestigious company in China. i(大寫)fear that i would have been on the job road (中式英語)back and forth .i really appreciate this precious oppotunity(拼寫錯誤opportunity) which you offered. every one(首字母大寫) agrees that it was you who wrote a letter to the esteemed company(刪除) boss, regarding as(刪除) my qualifications ,education back –ground ,and my special skills at computer program which i have a huge intrest in(刪除). Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! please(首字母大寫)accept my gratitude.
My sincerely,
Li Ming
4分
微點評：作文內容很豐富，但是你的表達能力還有待提高，而且要注意書信的寫作格式，以及大小寫的問題。
第五篇
Dear teacher,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your help to improve my English. If it had not been for your assistance in the respect of English writing, I fear that I would have been so outstanding achievement.
Every one agrees that it was you who are kindness and seems that you don’t feel tired forever. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意見：
Dear teacher,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your help to improve my English. If it had not been for your assistance in the respect of English writing(in 後面應該加動名詞，此外，respect 是尊敬的意思，用詞不當), I fear that I would have been so outstanding achievement.(這句話是虛擬語氣，意思是如果不是你的幫助，我恐怕將會…)
Every one agrees that it was you who are kindness and duty(it was…who…是個強調句，這句話的意思是每個人都說是你…例如幫助我)It seems that you don’t feel tired forever. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
2分
微點評：英語的句號是.你的英語基礎比較薄弱，建議你多看看英語範文，背一些模版。
5-7分
第一篇
Dear Pro. Smith,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your assistance. If it had not been for your assistance in sending timely the list of reference books which I asked for, I fear that I would have not been achieved my essay on the deadline.
Everyone agrees that it was you who save munch valuable time for me to search the reference books in the library and these reference books which are rather professional conform to the requirements of my essay. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意見：
Dear Pro. Smith,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your assistance. If it had not been for your assistance in sending timely(刪掉)the list of reference books(加to me timely) which I asked for, I fear that I would have not been achieved my essay on(改爲by ) the deadline.
Everyone agrees that it was you who save(改爲saved) munch (拼寫錯誤，改爲much)valuable time for me to search the reference books in the library and these reference books which are rather professional conform to the requirements of my essay. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
6分
微點評：寫作文時要再細心一些，儘量避免單詞拼寫的錯誤。時態要保持前後一致。
第二篇
Dear Bob,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm reception in this travel abroad. If it had not been for your assistance in this traveling that you are as a guide for me, I fear that I would have been lost so that I cannot find the way coming back.
Everyone agrees that it was you who patiently guide me to every tourist attractions and explain some of peculiar stories about sceneries. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意見：
Dear Bob,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm reception in this travel (改爲in the journey)abroad. If it had not been for your assistance in this traveling (改爲on the trip)that you are as a guide for me, I fear that I would have been lost so that I cannot(改爲couldn’t) find the way coming back.
Every one agrees that it was you who patiently guide(改爲guided) me to every tourist attractions and explain some of peculiar stories about sceneries. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
6分
微點評：作文寫得還不錯，但應保持時態的前後一致以及固定搭配。
第三篇
Dear Teacher,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your ongoing patience and selfless care. If it had not been for your assistance in our English study, I fear that I would have been failed my CET4 and CET6.
Even one agrees that it was you who has always been devoting most of your free time to day to day English teaching and instruction in test-taking skills. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意見：
Dear Teacher,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your ongoing patience and selfless care. If it had not been for your assistance in our English study, I fear that I would have been failed(改爲failing)(加to pass) my CET4 and CET6.
Even one agrees that it was you who has(改爲 had) always been devoting most of your free time to day to day English teaching and instruction(改爲instructing) in test-taking skills. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
7分
微點評：作文沒有什麼大問題，但是要注意時態的一致以及某些句型的固定用法。
第四篇
Dear sir,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness to lend me the umbrella. If it had not been for your assistance in lending the umbrella to me when it was raining，I fear that I would have been in trouble to get home.
Every one agrees that it was you who always helping others in trouble. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely
修改意見：
Dear sir,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness to lend me the umbrella. If it had not been for your assistance in lending the umbrella to me when it was raining，I fear that I would have been in trouble to get home.
Every one agrees that it was you who always helping(改爲 helped) others in trouble. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely(加逗號)
加名字
5分
微點評：小作文的字數要求是100詞，不要少於100詞，否則是要扣分的。書信的寫作格式要牢記於心。要注意時態的一致性。雖然作文沒有什麼大問題，但內容過於簡單，其實你可以把內容再擴充一下，用一些高級的詞彙和句型。
第五篇
Dear Ms. Wang,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness help last week. If it had not been for your assistance in bringing me my admission card for examination in time, I fear that I would have been missed the opportunity to be a servant in the government which I have prepared for a long time.
Every one agrees that it was you who are my deliverer to save me from such troublesome situation. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意見：
Dear Ms. Wang,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your kindness(改爲kind) help last week. If it had not been for your assistance in bringing me my admission card for examination in time, I fear that I would have been missed(改爲missing) the opportunity to be a servant in the government which I have prepared for a long time.
Every one agrees that it was you who are(改爲were) my deliverer to save me from such troublesome situation. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
6分
微點評：寫作文時要再認真一點，寫完後再檢查一遍，有些小錯就可以及時改正，另外，建議你去看一下虛擬語氣的句型。時態要保持一致。
8-10分
第一篇
Dear Tommy,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you timely returning admission ticket to me.
If it had not been for your assistance in warmheartedly picking up my admission ticket and getting it back to me, I fear that I would have been missed my law exam held for once a year.
Every one agrees that it was you who came to help me and saved me from the trouble. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Jane Yang
修改意見：
Dear Tommy,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you timely returning admission ticket to me.
If it had not been for your assistance in warmheartedly picking up my admission ticket and getting it back to me, I fear that I would have been missed(改爲missing) my law exam held for once a year.
Every one agrees that it was you who came to help me and saved me from the trouble. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Jane Yang
8分
微點評：作文寫得很不錯，但是要注意虛擬語氣的用法，建議再複習一下。
第二篇
Dear Eleven,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my Olympic Game in Maths. I fear that I would have been give it up early.
Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
修改意見：
Dear Eleven,
I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my (加上study of)Olympic Game in Maths(奧數是Mathematic Olympiad ). I fear that I would have been give(改爲giving) it up early.
Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
8分
微點評：這篇小作文整體來講寫的不錯。建議你如果遇到某些不確定但又不是非常重要的專有名詞，可以改爲其他有把握的詞，例如本篇作文中提到的奧數，完全可以改爲其他的比賽。
